First things first: Congratz on your placement in the costume contest!
Second: black and yellow checkerboard pattern is actually quite canon... OTC canon in fact. A little Rebel pilot who was a friend of Luke from Tattooine... Biggs Darklighter:
Third thing: I think we were all a bit dejected when you dissappeared. I know you took alot of heat for your color pattern and I was a part of it. but, there were a couple of easy compromises that you could have made, and still can, to really pull this kit together and have a winner!
Like McCoy I think the checkerboard on the armor and soft goods is over kill and takes what could be a great and unique color pattern into the gaudy range. If you went too black on your cape and vest, youd have an original and excellant kit here. Look slike you did a very legit job on the weathering too. I think this has a very OTC fit and feel to it.
That said, based only upon this pic, without being able to see other angles and such, if you applied it as is, it would likely pass app. But, I think those changes in the soft parts would honor and retain the "you" in the kit and take it from being a bit over the top to being very well done.